Antigone Cadmus

Hey! Here as requested! I don't want to repeat what everyone already said, but it is kind of confusing how you put the "when/what..." information at the top. Major, major ...

Hey, Hermione! Welcome to YWS. I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer today. ^_^ My critique is in bold. It had been several years since she had seen her twin ...

Hey, The Fire in Me! My critique is in bold. Chapter 1 “I wish I were a whale.” I straightened up my back in pride because I had just made ...

Hey, Kenni! First of all, I just wanted to tell you that before you psot your work here on YWS, you should have two reviews of other's work. Thanks! Onto ...

Hey, Voxina! *shakes hand* I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer for today. ^_^ A tall, rail thin guy The word guy feels too casual. Man would be fine here. ...

Hey, Princess! I'm too lazy to open another window, so your review will be in one ginormous quote! Lol- Did you know spell check recognizes ginormous? Anyway... On with the ...

No reviews? Aww. I'll review for you! Okay, there are just too many errors to do a line by line. I'll just give you some hints: -When someone new talks, ...

Hey, Night Mistress! Here as requested! An old woman sat in a rocking chair with her hands in her lap, swaying back and forth. Eirian enjoyed the warmth of the ...

Nice to meet you! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer for today. ^_^ First of all, I'd like to welcome you to YWS. It's a great place to receive ...

Hey, zoorah! As promised. Well, five pages exceeds what I said I'd review, but I'll try my best. Warning: I only skimmed the above reviews. I might repeat some things. ...

As promised, Maki-chan! “Beth…Beth!” Please don't use elipses. They are amateurish. You could easily divide this into two sentences. “Are you ok?” She asked. De-capitalize she. After the end

Hey, Vera! I know I'm two days late, but welcome to YWS! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer today ^_^ It was quite a marvelous day, the the sun ...

I'm bored of doing nit-picks. This piece was very nice, great description. The only thing is... -Demeter and Persephone's reunion was seriously lacking in emotion. Demeter was in morning for ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! It's a great place to have your work reviewed, so return the favor! You should have two reviews before you post your own work. Also, I ...

As promised! First of all, thank you for keeping it short! You could post a bit more, but this is a nice legnth. [/quote]An old woman sat in a rocking ...